Mouth of Ashes

Mouth of Ashes
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2016

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Page Turning Simulator, March 9, 2016

While Mouth of Ashes doesn't contain major bugs (because there is little room for them) or spelling errors (because it's short), these are the only things it gets right. It is a example of everything that could go wrong in a game.

It focuses on creating a world, without making understanding it a puzzle. It inconviniences the reader by putting everything examinable behind a link, instead of letting him skim at his will. There is no interacivity, but there are choices without effect. It is static fiction, and it doesn't want to be played.

The initial version didn't include the pictures as part of the download, the lack of which was my least important complaint. The structural issues are still a fundabental flaw, which make any merit from the story moot.

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verityvirtue, March 8, 2016 - Reply
Hi! I'm sorry you didn't enjoy it at all. Could I clarify what you mean by "The dowload [sic] is a html instead of an archive including the pictures"? I'm still new at wrangling Twine into submission, especially making it available for offline play.

E. W. B., March 9, 2016 - Reply
Alright, I'll fix my spelsing, and that I made it sound like I didn't enjoy it. I'm impressed. You made so many mistakes at once. Not including a picture in the download was icing on the cake, because it shows you could add background pictures, but not either save them to the same folder as the html and use 7z or something, or add the picture to the html as a base64.

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