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Wrong Floor

by Andrew Stone


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(based on 3 ratings)
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About the Story

A create your own adventure story. Very much in the process of being developed and written but any feedback is much appreciated. Bear in mind written by an amateur but i'm open minded :) Currently on V4

Game Details

Language: English (en)
Current Version: 4
License: Freeware
Development System: Twine
IFID: 635569A8-2D3A-4BDD-A0D3-F2CE1D7D3B16
TUID: 1fpvnid7dfjte87e

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V3 out! September 6, 2015
V3 out! September 6, 2015
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2 of 2 people found the following review helpful:
Nice to see what Twine2 Harlowe format looks like., May 25, 2015
by Hanon Ondricek (United States)
Twine 2's "Harlowe" format is the default, and it's so much nicer than "Sugarcane" which was the previous default format. Harlowe sports black on white, large, serif text.

This game is not completed yet, but the author made it public on IFDB and requested feedback. Therefore I'm not giving it a star rating.

I thought this would be a zombie story the way it sets up. You are in an elevator and can only choose to go to the first floor. You exit the elevator and there are dead and dying everywhere. Somehow the protagonist turns out to be a doctor. In my sequence I defibrillated a dying patient (glad I knew what I was doing) and she vomited all over me. The staff member helping asks if I want coffee.

There are lots of typos, lots of dropped punctuation, lots of missed capitalization, lots of missed commas inside quotation marks. The writing seems reasonably competent in what can only be considered a first draft. My feedback is "fix the typos, finish the game."

I would highly encourage (with all respect) this author to find a Twine or IF community and solicit beta-testing in the future before submitting work here, as IFDB is usually the place for a finished product. Good places to find help and beta testing would be the intfiction.org forums and the twinery.org forums.
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